I love this, Terry - what a lovely angle for your story.
My favourite kind of writing is exactly this: the travel diary - Three Men in a Boat, Wild, Walking Home, The Salt Path, Coasting - and I'm saving up for a walking/writing trip somewhere beautiful in the next couple of years. Reading your post has prompted me to blow the dust off a project of mine, and I'm very grateful to you for that!
Another great experiment in style! Keep 'em coming!
"... a convoy system developed during the war: nothing for ages and then three at the same time." Hey! We have that same system here on the metro. Three number #2 buses will pass by and 40 minutes later, the #3 I am waiting for.
"...a bored ham sandwich..." I love that you said bored rather than boring.
"...she declared me almost fit." Oh, to be almost fit again. sigh...
The problem with any kind of concussion is that everything you described may have happened days ago so. So, you might have forgotten a few things, didn't wake up with a new dog did you?
Thanks very much, Beth. Yes, sorry about that, I didn't notice that autocorrect had stuck its nose in. I corrected after I sent the email. It should nhave read "distrusted"
I love this, Terry - what a lovely angle for your story.
My favourite kind of writing is exactly this: the travel diary - Three Men in a Boat, Wild, Walking Home, The Salt Path, Coasting - and I'm saving up for a walking/writing trip somewhere beautiful in the next couple of years. Reading your post has prompted me to blow the dust off a project of mine, and I'm very grateful to you for that!
Another great experiment in style! Keep 'em coming!
Thanks, Rebecca. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Your walking/writing trip idea sounds lovely. And painting I hope.
Walking/painting/writing - such a lovely combination. 😊
Ok so EVERYONE likes the bored ham sandwich then...
I have very discerning readers who appreciate amazing literature, that's my explanation anyway!
Very good, Terry. I believe all travel diaries are made more interesting with rickshaw rides.
😁 Thanks, Jim!
As ever, incredibly believable and well executed.
"bored ham sandwich" a winning line, haha.
Thanks you, Sire 😁
Seconded. Great line!
cheers, mate😀
"...a bored ham sandwich..." Made me laugh.
Ok thirded then...
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"... a convoy system developed during the war: nothing for ages and then three at the same time." Hey! We have that same system here on the metro. Three number #2 buses will pass by and 40 minutes later, the #3 I am waiting for.
"...a bored ham sandwich..." I love that you said bored rather than boring.
"...she declared me almost fit." Oh, to be almost fit again. sigh...
Metro: it must be a universal problem!
'bored...': I love a good transferred epithet 😁
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I LOVE your new ID photo. So darned cute.
aw shucks. Thanks. I WAS cute in those days, but it wore off! Chortle.
Not hardly. If you were my little boy I would love you to death!
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The problem with any kind of concussion is that everything you described may have happened days ago so. So, you might have forgotten a few things, didn't wake up with a new dog did you?
LOL. It happened weeks ago. Funny you should say that... No! Chortle.
Well done! You keep on finding new approaches!! So clever. And definitely readable.
(A minor query on ‘district strangers’?) A good read. Thanks so much.
Thanks very much, Beth. Yes, sorry about that, I didn't notice that autocorrect had stuck its nose in. I corrected after I sent the email. It should nhave read "distrusted"
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Distrusted strangers has a lovely sinister edge though
It stems from my love of noir films and hardboiled fiction. You should look at the hardboiled version, I think you'll like it. https://terryfreedman.substack.com/p/experiments-in-style-hardboiled