Ha! Fantastic. You were right. Hardboiled is where it’s at. I’ll check out the others too. 😉 This was a lot of fun. Glad to have met you in Office Hours, Terry!
Hardboiled through and through - my favourite version so far! Like reading Chandler or Hammett - or, actually, Jim Thompson - my favourite of that genre.
Terry, I absolutely love this! Your voice evokes Raymond Chandler, and the story is oozing so deliciously with descriptive language.
The night is like a cobra, neon lights are bored, a car horn is lonely, the wind must've been on vacation from Alaska.... I could get lost in all this - and I mean that as a compliment!
Another brilliant Experiment in style - I don't know how you do it. Extraordinary work!
I could hear the moody background music during the whole read. So well done. I heard the perfect narrator's voice - was it yours? - reading it to me, as if I wasn't reading at all, but just listening. I'd say your experiment in hardboiled is A1 perfect.
Now write the screenplay. This was fab. I pictured Humphrey Bogart. Did you really get a concussion? You’re not supposed to do anything, no TV, no writing, no reading. 🤫
What fun the hardboiled version is. Back in the days of those men driving hacks and dames who were cool.
Ha! Fantastic. You were right. Hardboiled is where it’s at. I’ll check out the others too. 😉 This was a lot of fun. Glad to have met you in Office Hours, Terry!
Hardboiled through and through - my favourite version so far! Like reading Chandler or Hammett - or, actually, Jim Thompson - my favourite of that genre.
Terry, I absolutely love this! Your voice evokes Raymond Chandler, and the story is oozing so deliciously with descriptive language.
The night is like a cobra, neon lights are bored, a car horn is lonely, the wind must've been on vacation from Alaska.... I could get lost in all this - and I mean that as a compliment!
Another brilliant Experiment in style - I don't know how you do it. Extraordinary work!
No 2 is obviously the one that hits me round the head.
Brimful of jaded wit - exactly how one would expect a tired detective to be.
This one is also my favorite so far. It's somehow cryptic and familiar, dramatic and funny all at the same time. Genius :-)
I could hear the moody background music during the whole read. So well done. I heard the perfect narrator's voice - was it yours? - reading it to me, as if I wasn't reading at all, but just listening. I'd say your experiment in hardboiled is A1 perfect.
Now write the screenplay. This was fab. I pictured Humphrey Bogart. Did you really get a concussion? You’re not supposed to do anything, no TV, no writing, no reading. 🤫
What the hell Terry? Keep going! I want to read the rest of the story.
We certainly get great value from that original story! A very cool rendition. Thanks slugger Terry.
🤣Loved it, Terry! One of the best ones, I think; it felt like reading a new story, alongside new vocabulary, all very credible.
As per Jim, a new favourite Terry!
Is this perhaps also the longest form one? Or maybe it's just all the speech making it seem so. (No bad thing, just occurred to me as I was reading.)
You nailed the noir 😆
Fave line: A bull was loafing around nursing a gasper.
Absolutely my new favorite. Nice work, Terry.
It’s hilarious - I love writing like this but not everyone sees the funny side I agree. Taking it far too seriously imo, but there you go!
Tony Vivaldi? The same Tony Vivaldi what wrote that "Four Seasons" tune?
Brilliant!